My Amazing Holiday
Yippee, we sped to our aunties house. When we got there we watched a great T.V. show. After that we played Resistance on PS3.
Next we ate McDonald's, cookies and fizzy drinks they were delicious! I was full and I wanted to play at the backyard on the bikes. We were having fun playing on the bikes.
After a while I got bored, so I went to back to play on the X-box 360 with my cousin, Soloni, and brother, Christopher. There was excitement in the air as my car sped off the track on Apocolypse.
I had such a lot of fun going to my aunties house. It was great, I didn’t want to go home.
Katarake Abera
Hi Kata,
ReplyDeleteI like how you put heaps off hard work into it and used alot effort in your writinng. I also like how you put some hooks in it and made it perfect, and I also like your wild self that you made.
Well done and keep your hard work upKatrake.
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Hi kata
ReplyDeleteI liked that you worked hard and put in a lot of effort with your writing. I liked how you put in some great hooks. And your wild self looks really funny. Where did you learn how to write hooks.
Keep up the great work Kata.